"Homeroom Reform Essay."

Homeroom Reform Essay First Draft=
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Body Paragraph 1
Topic sentence (idea) We believe that if SPA had a new set of computers in the cafe, more students would be able to finish their assignments on time.
Supporting details
how it will work: It will work because if we had up to date computers that are running properly and quicker students would be able to learn and
d complete daily work
why it needs funding:It needs funding because it will make grades go up and the computers we have right now lack several of those needs.


Body Paragraph 2
Topic sentence (personal impact): If we had new computers that students could work on, then they wouldn’t have an excuse to say they lost the homework.
Closing sentence: If we had these needs met the students grades on this campus should improve drastically
Supporting details
way prize will help you The prize will help me because I will be able to work on my schoolwork and complete assignments.
another way prize will help you Another way it would help me is it would improve my technology skills.
Closing sentence That is why getting new computers would benefit me personally.


Body Paragraph 3
Topic sentence (contributions made) The contributions made towards the purchase of new computers would also benefit students in realizing the cost of a computer.
Supporting details
way you have alread that y worked on the project (or something you do related to the project) The way we have already worked on this project is by informing teachers we need b tter technology in order to maintain or improve our grades.
another way you have already worked on the project: Another way we have helped this project is having a specific time we use the computer in order for other kids to get their work done.
Closing sentence In realizing the cost of a computer students will take their work on the computer more seriously.

Body Paragraph 4
Topic sentence (impact on school) If we had new computers for our school it would help the teachers take into consideration giving more assignments online instead of on paper.
Supporting details
way the project will help the students of SPA: The way the
another way the project will help the students of SPA
Closing sentence:


Conclusion Paragraph
Restatement of thesis using new words
Summary of main ideas of body paragraphs:
Final thought


I wrote this essay with Heather W. We wrote it for the KNSD Homeroom Reform Essay Contest.